Swallowed in the Sea: A Path of Freedom
Prologue: A Vow for Redemption
Elizabeth Swann tottered towards the dilapidated, wooden door of Tia Dalma’s hut and pushed it open. The hinges squeaked as she elbowed by it and wandered out onto the thin balcony with limited walking space. Leaning against the wall, her lips formed a thin line. They quivered lightly, though, as a few moments passed and the touch of a warm tear slid down her fair cheek. She had promised herself she wouldn’t shed tears for the decision she had made, yet, it seemed her emotions were disloyal to her mind. How could I...her thoughts trailed off as the image of the black pearl sinking into the depths of the sea along with its captain clouded her mind. A man– no, a friend had been condemned to death and it was all her fault. By this time, plenty of tears had managed to break free and make their way down the sides of her face without her taking much notice. As she took a glance over her shoulder to look through the window, she noted young William Turner, hunched over near a corner of Tia Dalma’s cluttered dwelling. Elizabeth grimaced as she stared at the man whom she had betrayed when she had locked lips with Sparrow. Of course he saw it, her thoughts soured. The way he had spoken and the looks he had given her had made it easy to tell. At that time, though, it didn’t matter much to her what he had seen; she was too busy focusing on her earlier actions of shackling the unsteady captain to his ship. She had left him for death, and now, she had to bring him back. Rescuing him would clear her conscience and besides, he was an innocent man who didn’t deserve his fate. Just like Will, she cared for Jack.
Turning towards the murky waters surrounding the voodoo priestess’ hovel, she noticed tiny flickering lights grazing the water. The villagers who had greeted their return with their faces masked with sorrow had left their candles on small clay plates which swayed with water’s steady motion. Without a word nor sound, Elizabeth drifted towards the ladder and stepped down each stair and into the water. Her actions were unclear to even herself at one point for it felt as if her heart were leading her. Once she came close to one of the floating candles she guided it into her hands and cupped the sides. She studied the warm light flickering against its wick in pure nostalgia. As soon as her thoughts collected and her copper eyes focused, she mouthed some words to herself then pushed the candle off as far as she could down stream. She had made a promise to herself.
It was a promise... to save Jack.














Comments
(man... love triangles really confuse me now and days) But yeah... nice descriptions *thumbs up*
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"Die! Just Die! You have no talent at all!" -Jiraiya
Sorry about that, hun. This is FANTASTIC though, as you know. I love it to PEICES I swear. Definatly fav-worthy and I'm dying dying dying to read the next chapter. Please write it soon so I can stop nearly exploding with excitement. xD; I love all the detail you put into your writing and Ahhhh! You're just so amazing for words, Gennaaa! o__o
Seriously Genna, you should SO be a writer when you get older. And be a part-time voice actor too, and then we can voice act in the same show. 8D *shot* XD Nah tha'd be too cool~ <33 But OMG. If you did become a writer I would SO be right there with ya reading every word you write! But ANYWHO. You keep up the fantastic work you've been doing kay? And seriously...Seriously... xD NOW. *shot* <333 *faves*
You are far far far too kind, really!!
Haha who knows! Maybe! I've always wanted to be an actress/voice actress so who knows! Haha yes..we shall do the same show
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"Bizarre is good! Common has hundreds of explanations. Bizarre has hardly any."
- Dr. House
Maybe I'm just easily impressed when the majority of people I've seen write far better than I do, but still.
Crystal did well to point this out in her journal. She has an eye for quality. ^-^
Your style is so descriptive, so mood-setting.. Even if I haven't seen the second movie yet, I couldn't resist after reading the first few sentences.
Just beautiful, it's writing like this that can really paint perfect pictures in my head. I can't stress enough how wonderful your skills are in both knowledge of vocabulary and how to utilize it, just by reading this prologue. The words piece together so snugly, like a completed jigsaw puzzle portraying the actual image of the scene itself.
Detail = Win.
Poetic description of detail = Sheer ownage. And that's what you've got.
Only one slight piece of advice I would give you.. If you don't mind it, of course. It may not even be creditable, since I'm not a real writer, but if it may help, heed this sentence here:
To me it sticks out a little too much compared to the rest of the work.
P.S. I love that song..!! ;_;
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