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Swallowed in the Sea: Prologue by ~blazing-assasin:iconblazing-assasin:



Swallowed in the Sea: A Path of Freedom

Prologue: A Vow for Redemption


Elizabeth Swann tottered towards the dilapidated, wooden door of Tia Dalma’s hut and pushed it open. The hinges squeaked as she elbowed by it and wandered out onto the thin balcony with limited walking space. Leaning against the wall, her lips formed a thin line. They quivered lightly, though, as a few moments passed and the touch of a warm tear slid down her fair cheek. She had promised herself she wouldn’t shed tears for the decision she had made, yet, it seemed her emotions were disloyal to her mind. How could I...her thoughts trailed off as the image of the black pearl sinking into the depths of the sea along with its captain clouded her mind. A man– no, a friend had been condemned to death and it was all her fault. By this time, plenty of tears had managed to break free and make their way down the sides of her face without her taking much notice. As she took a glance over her shoulder to look through the window, she noted young William Turner, hunched over near a corner of Tia Dalma’s cluttered dwelling. Elizabeth grimaced as she stared at the man whom she had betrayed when she had locked lips with Sparrow. Of course he saw it, her thoughts soured. The way he had spoken and the looks he had given her had made it easy to tell. At that time, though, it didn’t matter much to her what he had seen; she was too busy focusing on her earlier actions of shackling the unsteady captain to his ship. She had left him for death, and now, she had to bring him back. Rescuing him would clear her conscience and besides, he was an innocent man who didn’t deserve his fate. Just like Will, she cared for Jack.

Turning towards the murky waters surrounding the voodoo priestess’ hovel, she noticed tiny flickering lights grazing the water. The villagers who had greeted their return with their faces masked with sorrow had left their candles on small clay plates which swayed with water’s steady motion. Without a word nor sound, Elizabeth drifted towards the ladder and stepped down each stair and into the water. Her actions were unclear to even herself at one point for it felt as if her heart were leading her. Once she came close to one of the floating candles she guided it into her hands and cupped the sides. She studied the warm light flickering against its wick in pure nostalgia. As soon as her thoughts collected and her copper eyes focused, she mouthed some words to herself then pushed the candle off as far as she could down stream. She had made a promise to herself.

It was a promise... to save Jack.
©2006-2009 ~blazing-assasin
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Author's Comments

--->Chapter One: [link] <---

Alright! So here is the prologue to my Pirates of the Caribbean fanfic. I'm not going to give a brief overview of what its about just yet since i still have to sort through a few things, but I hope you'll give it a chance anyway. Yes, it is a jackxelizabeth fic, i won't lie. But it also has brief willxelizabeth as well. And there is a lot of action, adventure, and so on. And many characters will be showing up, too. So its not gunna be just a sappy love story so please approach with an open mind! And please don't flame either ^^; Critique is welcome, but please don't butcher it. I'd rather you tell me what i did wrong and maybe suggestions on how to correct it. Thank you! :blowkiss: Enjoy!

SPOILERS ALERT
Oh and if you haven't seen the second movie, i'd recommend not to read yet cause you might be a tad bit confused and upset if anything is given away ^^; :heart:

Disclaimer: I do not own Pirates of the Caribbean or any characters involved. Nor do I own the song Swallowed in the Sea by Coldplay.

EDIT

I was kinda in a hurry when i posted this so I totally forgot to thank my beta: Who helped me out and will continue to assist me out with my future writing :aww: So thank you soo much Crystal for taking the time to look it over!! :heart:

EDIT2

Sorry, 'nother edit lmao. Alright since i've put up a summary over at fanfiction.net, i figured i might as well put one up here too. Its gunna be pretty brief since i still have much more to sort out for the story. But i figure, better than nothing!

Elizabeth Swann is fed up with the proper life she was born into and wishes for a life of freedom after feeling what it was like to be a pirate. With this decision, she is forced to leave many things behind --such as her marriage to William. Distraught with her own choice and with no where to turn, she is visited by none other than Jack Sparrow who offers her a chance of a lifetime. Unaware to the fact, though, that by accepting Jack's offer, she has involuntarily thrown herself into a desperate race to save both her and Jack's souls. Along this trecherous journey, though, Elizabeth begins to learn to follow her heart and discovers that the path of freedom she has embarked on, has only just begun...

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:iconbemobebe:
I actually liked this one, I can't wait till you continue it. It ended with a CLIFFHANGER >:]
(man... love triangles really confuse me now and days) But yeah... nice descriptions *thumbs up*

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"Die! Just Die! You have no talent at all!" -Jiraiya :dance:
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Gennaa~ <3 I can't belive how long it took me to comment on this. o__o :heart:

Sorry about that, hun. This is FANTASTIC though, as you know. I love it to PEICES I swear. Definatly fav-worthy and I'm dying dying dying to read the next chapter. Please write it soon so I can stop nearly exploding with excitement. xD; I love all the detail you put into your writing and Ahhhh! You're just so amazing for words, Gennaaa! o__o

Seriously Genna, you should SO be a writer when you get older. And be a part-time voice actor too, and then we can voice act in the same show. 8D *shot* XD Nah tha'd be too cool~ <33 But OMG. If you did become a writer I would SO be right there with ya reading every word you write! But ANYWHO. You keep up the fantastic work you've been doing kay? And seriously...
...write some more before I implode with love for your story. o___o
Seriously... xD NOW. *shot* <333 *faves*

:hug:~
:iconblazing-assasin:
Aww Crystal.. :tears:

You are far far far too kind, really!! :cling: Honestly I don't know how i'd be able to write or do anything i do on here without you! You're such an inspiration! And you're always so nice to me with all your comments! Makes me feel good inside even when im not feeling all confident in myself :) :heart:

Haha who knows! Maybe! I've always wanted to be an actress/voice actress so who knows! Haha yes..we shall do the same show ;P Thank you soo much again..i soo appreciate it! Haha and yes, yes, im writing, im writing!! :XD: Haha thanks a lot <3 I appreciate it soo much!! :glomp: <333333333
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Thanks so much! :hug: Muahah yes..the dreaded cliffhanger haha Thanks again! Glad you're interested in continuing to read! :heart:
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I'm soooooo glad I could help~ <333 :hug: Yeah, I remember you telling me that you wanted to be one! So tha'd be too cool! You should be a singer too! XD The singing, drawing, writing, voice actress, actress! <3 XDD Sounds good to me! *shot* :hug:
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^^ you are a great writer!! I want to read more though, i suppose i should watch dead man's chest first... XD

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"Bizarre is good! Common has hundreds of explanations. Bizarre has hardly any."
- Dr. House
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Thank you soo much!! :glomp: I really appreciate it :D lmao yah it would help ^^; but my fic takes place after it all including the third one, too. So things may be brought up that may be confusing until you see the second. Thanks again!! :heart:
:iconarcticfreeze14:
Beyond impressive.
Maybe I'm just easily impressed when the majority of people I've seen write far better than I do, but still.

Crystal did well to point this out in her journal. She has an eye for quality. ^-^
Your style is so descriptive, so mood-setting.. Even if I haven't seen the second movie yet, I couldn't resist after reading the first few sentences.


  • "Leaning against the wall, her lips formed a thin line. They quivered lightly, though, as a few moments passed and the touch of a warm tear slid down her fair cheek..."

  • "She studied the warm light flickering against its wick in pure nostalgia. As soon as her thoughts collected and her copper eyes focused, she mouthed some words to herself then pushed the candle off as far as she could down stream..."

  • Just beautiful, it's writing like this that can really paint perfect pictures in my head. I can't stress enough how wonderful your skills are in both knowledge of vocabulary and how to utilize it, just by reading this prologue. The words piece together so snugly, like a completed jigsaw puzzle portraying the actual image of the scene itself.

    Detail = Win.
    Poetic description of detail = Sheer ownage. And that's what you've got.

    Only one slight piece of advice I would give you.. If you don't mind it, of course. It may not even be creditable, since I'm not a real writer, but if it may help, heed this sentence here:

  • "The hinges squeaked as she elbowed by it and wandered out onto the thin balcony with limited walking space..."

  • To me it sticks out a little too much compared to the rest of the work. ^^; Quite a few technical terms used, the words aren't quite as soft and deep as the rest. Again I'm no writer comparable to you, so I dare not give any vocabulary suggestions, but see if you can revise that slightly. The rest of it is fabulous and well-deserving of a fave. n.n Wonderful work, I wonder if I can keep up to catch the rest of this fic~ :+fav:


    P.S. I love that song..!! ;_; :heart:
    :iconblazing-assasin:
    :hug: Muhahaha there's so much i want to do!! :XD: :glomp: :heart:

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